Wednesday 10 July 2013

Excerpt #3 and #4

You read that correctly. Now, whilst I am still behind, I feel that you need to see the progress my characters are making. I've begun to see Olivia Rhodes' position on the crew, whilst only a medic she can command a room when need be. Torres has been getting more and more face time and has even accumulated the nickname "spider monkey". McCallister is known for being the voice of reason for the Captain when she's expressing her severe dislike for anything, anybody or certain situations involving certain people. Hunter is still as vocal as ever along with Garrison whilst Eliot on the other hand has grown quieter. (Note to self, write him some more words) Nelson needs a bit more work on him and a few interactions whilst Sokoloff and Zach, the pilots, are stuck behind doing their jobs of flying and docking their newly acquired vessel Aries.

Bit of a drag of a paragraph but one last thing, they discovered a dead body and an unconscious, severely injured woman aboard Aries.

To the excerpt:

 Charlie let nothing but her breathing invade her hearing. The lurching of the ship let her know that it had docked with Aries. Once the green light by the door let her know that the air had been pumped full of oxygen she let other sounds invade her senses. “McCallister! With me, Garrison and Torres, Rhodes and Nelson, Eliot and Hunter bring up the rear! On me!”
    She let the air fill the airlock for a little longer before she opened the door, letting McCallister stamp through first, rifle raised. She followed him, swinging her gun to the left of the airlock. Light footsteps behind told her Garrison and Torres were close behind. She and McCallister made it to Aries’ airlock and paused, waiting for Hunter and Eliot to close the airlock to their own ship. McCallister opened the door and Charlie swept through it first, going to the right whilst he crossed to the left. They swept through a few feet before stopping at the interior door that led to the innards of the ship. A small window in the door told Charlie that there wasn’t anybody nearby.
    The sound of the airlock closing let her know to carry on. “Everybody, cameras and microphones on.” People shuffled as they followed orders and soon, Charlie was opening the door that led to the main interior of Aries. The hallway that they were immediately placed in was large enough for two people side by side. It split off into three different paths, forward, left and right. “McCallister and I will take forward, Hunter and Eliot left, Garrison and Torres with the Doctors right. We’ll try to reconvene at the centre of the ship. Go.”
    Everybody pushed off and Charlie took her path first, McCallister following on the other side of the wall. The light from their torches lit the walls and floor, checking every possible space for rooms, doorways and alternate routes. They’d already come across two crossroads and had cleared both before keeping to their straight path directly to the centre of the ship. As they went they checked the rooms, finding offices and storage rooms. Everything about the simple design and small routes has military ship written all over them.
    It wasn’t long before they’d reached the mess hall that led straight to the bridge on the other side. Hunter and Eliot appeared behind them after a few minutes as she and McCallister checked the room for traps. The other four appeared, footsteps loud and careless in the empty ship.
    “Nothing,” Garrison said as he entered. “Nobody, no blood, nothing. Just a few blown fuses and busted wiring. Where’s the people that sent for help?”
    “Oxygen low my ass!” Hunter shouted as she paced the room.
    “Torres, Eliot, could somebody have faked the levels to an outside scan?”
    Both men looked at each other for a few seconds before offering her a shrug. Torres spoke. “It’s possible. But the actual temperature in a ship this old would need to be decreased for a lengthy amount of time.”
    Garrison nodded. “You can feel the chill in the air still. But somebody’s turned the temperature back up when we docked.”
    “So where is everybody?” Rhodes asked, voicing the question that had been on everybody’s mind.
    Charlie addressed her pilots, “Zach, Sokoloff. Run a heat signature scan of the ship. I want body heat signatures now.” Through their radios came silence, not the usual ‘Aye Captain’ that either of them would have said. “Zach! Sokoloff! Do you hear me?” Nothing.
    Then Aries shuddered violently, jerking everybody off their feet and onto their knees. “Fuck!” McCallister muttered before he pulled himself back up.
    There was the sound of metal straining and Charlie eyed the ships ceiling with worry. Then silence. The eerie silence made the hairs on the back of her neck stand up. It was too quiet, even by ship standards. Many a times Charlie had walked through the Valhalla and heard very little. But there was always a humming from the engine. Humming from the systems as they filtered the air. And even sometimes people still up, unable to sleep.
    But this? The only sounds to be heard were her crews stunted breathing. Nobody wanted to make too much sound. Nobody wanted to advertise that they were here. Nobody wanted the attention. Not a body. Not a drop of blood. A smear. Nothing. Nobody. But she could feel eyes on her. Watching her every step. Whatever it was, whoever it was, nobody wanted their attention. Just in case.
    "The fuck do you think happened?" Garrison. Ever the vocalist.
    Their radios buzzed and the ship juddered again, forcing them off their balance. Zach, still aboard the Valhalla was rushing through his words. "Sir, they jumped me. Dragged me out of the airlock and onto the Aries."
    Charlie's eyes went wide at the prospect. She moved through the mess hall to find the nearest view port and watched as their ship, her ship, started to push away from them. "Mother fuckers!" Hunter, her voice loud and angry, kicked at one of the wooden chairs and sent it flying.
    “Son of a bitch!” McCallister added.
    “Rhodes, Nelson, go check on Sokoloff and Zach. Garrison go with them. Torres, Eliot I want you to get to engineering and find out what the fuck this ship’s condition is. Does it still fly? Can we move it? Go!”
    She allowed herself to take a deep breathe, hiding her anger. Somebody had gotten past eight pairs of eyes. Somebody had waited until they’d passed, snuck onto Valhalla and then flew their own ship out of there, leaving them dead in the water. And it must’ve been a small team. Zach had said ‘they’ and it couldn’t have been too many who’d gotten past them. “Captain?” McCallister approached. “What do we do?”
    She let her gaze settle on his, bright and angry. “We get my ship back.” 

And because I'm so kind, another one, just a couple thousand words later:

Charlie kicked at the units in the kitchen, pissed and angry at everything that was going on. EMP. Hijacked ship. Command screwing them in the ass. Bad luck after bad luck. “Fuck!” The twisting in her stomach was back and worse. It was scratching its way up into her ribcage. “Fuck,” she whispered.
    McCallister appeared in the door to the mess, one hand on the door frame the other firmly fixed to his rifle. “Any guesses?”
    She turned, ran her hands over her face and sighed, planting them on her hips. “Command fucked us over. Big.”
    He turned his head over his shoulder then back as he stepped into the room. “I know.” His head twisted back over his shoulder, “But, should they know?”
    Charlie sighed, ducking her head. “I’ll keep my voice down.”
    “That’s not what I mean.” Her eyes flicked up. “Do we know for sure Command screwed us over?”
    She took a seat at the table in the mess, threw her gun onto the table and leaned back, profile stiff, tense. “It sure feels that way.” Her hands were running over her face again with another sigh. “Everybody’s thinking it McCallister, I’m the one fucking say it. Command fucked us. Please, tell me what part of this does not scream ‘screw you’.”
    “I know.”
    “Denying me access to public knowledge. Deleting the knowledge  minutes later. Leaving us with nothing to go on! Leaving us blind! That screams screwed over!”
    “I know!” McCallister called back. Silence echoed back. “I know.” More silence. “But I don’t think everybody else needs to know how you feel about it all. It won’t go down well and we don’t need Hunter or Garrison running their mouths or their arrogance.” Silence. “Let’s just,” he pulled a seat out and took a seat across from her. “think about how we’re going to get out of this mess and what we’re going to do next.”
    Charlie hated to admit it but McCallister was right. There’s no need to rile the crew up. The Captain can’t be seen getting angry at her own bosses. If she was angry at them it would reflect in the crew and they wouldn’t want to follow orders. Just to cause trouble. She was glad McCallister was her first in command. He had a level head when she didn’t. He couldn’t, wouldn’t want the responsibilities of Captain. Both of them knew that.
    But she was still pissed. The reasons Command guessed her crew didn’t follow orders was yes, because she would break the rules to get things done when appropriate. But Valhalla wasn’t her first ship. And even then she broke the rules. Broke them because Command gave her nothing but Bullshit.
    Charlie stood, grabbed her gun and stared McCallister in the face. “I’m not losing another team. Not because Command wanted to screw me over with no information.” And she left, heading straight for engineering.
    “Captain,” Nelson’s voice over the comms stopped her in her tracks. “You might want to get to medical. Something you should see.”
    She turned on her heels and came back to the mess, McCallister still seated in the same seat. She nodded her head, a silent ‘come with’ gesture, and they moved through the ship. Medical was less clean than the one on Valhalla but the intention was still there. And so was the blood. “How the hell did we miss that?” McCallister said.
    “Nelson!”
    The man appeared seconds later, saw the blood by their feet and nodded. “Yeah, the place was locked and dark when we went past. But, we couldn’t see anybody through the windows so we moved on.”
    “Just like that?” she asked. McCallister tilted his head in her direction and she sighed. “What did you want?”
    Nelson pointed to the other side of the room, in the direction of the smeared and drops of blood. They followed him into the next room, where several beds were set up for long term medical treatment. Beds lined one wall, each with its own curtain and set of magnetic stabilising that kept the beds in place and the people in them safe if the ship took damage. What he was referring to was the two bloodied bodies, a male and a female, both unconscious and their states unknown. Another bed was covered in blood, gauze strips, patches, scrubs, all bloodied and scattered across the bed, floor and room.
    “Conditions?”
    Nelson moved to the bed that held a young man in his late twenties, early thirties. Black hair was matted back, thick with patches of blood. His uniform had been ripped open and white gauze covered in red still lay across his stained chest. “This one’s dead. Two bullet wounds to the chest and another in the leg. The first was the critical, piercing a lung and severing an artery at the same time.” Charlie stepped closer to the bed and pulled on the uniform until his name became clear, Carter.
    Nelson moved over to the next bed where a woman lay, her face looking peaceful and content. Her leg was bandaged and her shoulder was wrapped in red stained fabric. Blonde hair was stuck to the skin, thick with sweat and small streams of blood. If Charlie had to guess the woman was in her mid-thirties. The rank on her uniform screamed Sergeant. She pulled on the uniform until a name was clear again, Murphy. “This one’s alive. Well, just about. Broken leg, bullet wound to her shoulder and that’s only on an external examination. I’ve asked Torres for the emergency backup in medical to be a priority. I assumed you wanted her alive.”
    “Good thinking. So she’s not up to talking then?”
    “Not just yet. I’m gonna give her some pain killers in a bit. I doubt whoever treated her knew exactly what would be appropriate.” He gestured to the many rummaged drawers and thrown open cupboards.
    Charlie let her eyes linger on Murphy’s body for a few more seconds before she tapped her radio on. “Rhodes to medical, Garrison and Hunter I want you there too. Torres, get the back-up power working now.” She let go and looked back at Nelson. “Take over from Rhodes on the bridge, keep an eye on Sokoloff and Zach just to make sure they’re fine.”
    Nelson moved out of medical and Charlie shared a look with McCallister. He spoke before she could, “Whatever they’re planning to do with our ship, looks like they can’t risk the injured. Left her here in hopes we take care of her.”
    “Yeah well, out of the goodness of our heart we’ll keep her drugged up and safe. For now.” McCallister quirked a brow. She rolled her eyes. “I’m kidding. But she has a hell of lot of explaining to do.”
    Rhodes appeared a minute later, already moving around the infirmary and pulling gloves on. “Torres better get the power back on down here. I don’t want a patient dying.”
    “He’s on it.” 

So, there we have two new excerpts. Now, I'm gonna get my ass back onto writing. 

Enjoy. 

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